谁能帮我看看这篇英语作文的语法这些错没有？谢了

Question

There are three people in my family, my father, my mother and me. My name is Ye Dan, I am 21 years old today, now in a school, I like surfing the Internet and shopping. My father in a working station, he is 49 years old this year, he likes to read novels online. My mother is a company 's accounting, she is 46 years old this year, her work very tired, but she insisted, she liked watching movies on the Internet, she always take care of we are one family life. I love my mom and Dad, because their daily hard work is for me, so I want to be a good child,

Answer 1

第三句 now in a school 语意不准确，不知你现在仍在校学习，还是你现在身在一所学校里。第四句 my father 后面缺谓语 works 或系动词 is，并且不知 working station 是指什么。my mother 不是 accounting 而应该是 accountant，后面 her work very tired 没有谓语，且 tired 语态错误，工作很累人是主动语态，变成形容词应该是 tiring，而人很累是被动语态，要用 tired。此后的两句都用过去时态不对，因为整段话都是说现在发生的事儿，忽然谈起过去“坚持工作”和“喜欢电影”，那就意味着现在不再这样了。因此错。she always take care of 后面必须跟名词性结构，而 we are one family 是个句子，所以错，而且 we are one family life，逻辑错误，因为我们拥有 life，但我们本身并不是 life。另外，英语中凡是独立的句子后面一定要用句号，不能一逗到底。以下是修改后的：
My family has three members, my father, my mother and me. My name is Ye Dan and I am 21 years old being a college student at the moment. I like surfing the internet and shopping. My father works in a train station. He is 49 years of age. He likes to read novels online. My mother is a corporate accountant. She is 46 this year. Her job is very tiring but she sticks on it and works hard. She likes watching movies on the internet and always takes care of my father and me. I love my mom and dad because I know all thier hard working is for me. So I want to be their good child.

Answer 2

There are three people in my family, my father, my mother and me.
people是中国教育的悲哀用法 标准应该用person people inportant这种咱们的常用词鬼佬基本不用

My name is Ye Dan, I am 21 years old today, now in a school, I like surfing the Internet and shopping.
today是什么意思？今天你生日？如果只是表示“现在21” 那就直接“I'm 21 years old” in a school 没这种说法，不要直译“在学校里”，用studying now或者 I'm a student 比较好

My father in a working station, he is 49 years old this year, he likes to read novels online.
同样地问题 in a working station 换一下说法，而且这个本来就没有谓语 语法也是错的。 this year 去掉 理由同上

My mother is a company 's accounting, she is 46 years old this year, her work very tired, but she insisted, she liked watching movies on the Internet, she always take care of we are one family life.
My mother is an accountant. this year去掉。 her work very tired？ 这是“她的工作很累”？ 标准的中国式英语啊~~~ although the work is tired, she insist. —— 这个一般现在时，过去时那表示她以前坚持，现在退休了？ 后面同样 为什么突然换成过去时了， she likes 就好
she always take care of we are one family life. 不懂 完全不懂 she always take care of us 你是说这个么？

I love my mom and Dad, because their daily hard work is for me, so I want to be a good child.
their daily hard work is for me这个同上 完全没有这种说法 because they work hard for my better life. 最后，你之前已经说了自己是21岁了 good child 这个说法....... 一般14岁以上就不用小孩来称呼了

Answer 3

There are three people in my family, my father, my mother and I. My name is Ye Dan. I am 21 years old today, now in a school, I like surfing the Internet and shopping. My father is in a working station. He is 49 years old this year. He likes reading novels online. My mother is a company accountant. She is 46 years old this year. Her work is very tiring, but she insists to continue. She likes watching movies on the Internet. She always takes care of our whole family. I love my Mum and Dad, because they work very hard every day for me. I want to be a good child.本回答被提问者采纳

Answer 4

There are three people in my family, my father, my mother and me. My name is Ye Dan, I am 21 years old,and I am a student.I like shopping and surfing the Internet.My father is 49 years old,and he is in a working station. He likes to read novels online.My mother is 46 years old.She is a accountant in a company,and her work is very tiring, but she insists. She likes watching movies online.She always takes care of our whole family. I love my Mum and Dad,what they work hard daily is for me,so I want to be a good child.