英语高手帮忙看看这篇文章有什么语法错误或用词不当等等,请指出,谢谢

英语高手帮忙看看这篇文章有什么语法错误或用词不当等等,请指出,
today i had a good time with my friend songdan,she is my best friend.this evening,we met each other as we had arranged the time.we met at about half past six ,we used to say that we meet at 7 o'clock,but my cheribic friend sent a messagge to me at 5:00.she said that she was very hungry,and she coundn't wait to eat. :0 my god! she even didn't had her breakfast.so i went out after i saw the message.how interesting!we met each other at about half past six.she is much taller than before.and i felt that i was a dwarf when i was standing by her.so i kept a distance with her first. :) but after a while i accepted this fact.and i have promised taht i would try my best to grow taller.she is about 1.76m tall.my god.why life is filled with so much suuperise.last time i saw her,she is about 1.70m.and this time she is much taller and a little thiner. :) a beautiful girl .wonderful!she came back yesterday,and she told me her returning at the first as she had promied.she is a best friend credibly.after we met each other,we went to do the most important thing,what is it then?of course ,it is -------------------------------------eating.every time we meet the most important thing is to eat eat the fry vegetables with capsicum.mmmmmm delicious.we all chose the sweet-and-sour taste.wonderful.i felt so enjoyable not only because the food is delicious ,but the more important is that the person who i was eating with.when we were eating ,we had a heart -to-heart talk.we talked some funny thingsmes we laughed loudly,even the people around us were looking at us.but happiness is innocent.so we went on laughing without the sharp expressiongs in the eyes of people around us.that feeling is as that of you are out of the world ,and there were only two people in the world.that's both of us.than after we ate our fry vegetables.we went to the KFC.why do we go there,i am sure you can't dope out.s has a lovely grandfa and he likes eating the food of KFC.
he is like a child and sometimes he is very funny.he is about more than 70 years old.and he never cares about his health.so we bought some to her grandfa.and we got a vouncher .and it will save a lot of money.then we went to drink jieke.she said it was delicious,but i felt that it tastes bad.but i drinked it over,and said it is delicious ,that's a bad feeling.i won't have it again.then we went to the night's street.things there are very cheap.we bought two rings and one for each ,in fact i don't like this type of ring ,but i chose one.because i want to commemorate the time with my best friend by the ring.and she bought a silk cape.she saw her teacher had one ,so she also bought one.

我们本来约在七点-we had (originally/initially)arranged to meet at 7
even didn't 到反了 she didn't even 。。
不可以用standing by her ,是standing next to her
kept a distance (from)her (at) first,或 initially
i accepted this fact and i have promised - 为什么突然变成用现在式?
surprise 写错,应该是不小心吧
last time i saw her,she (was) 。。
thiner --〉thinner
i was the first she told of her return
i felt so enjoyable -错了 it was so enjoyable 或 i enjoyed it so much
又是过去时态和现在时态混了,要小心
so we went on laughing without the sharp expressiongs in the eyes of people around us (这句肯定错,要表达什么?)
than 和 then ,别搞错
grandfa ? grandfather 的简写? 或许你们中国有吧,grandpa 是较常用的
drinked,错- drink,drank,drunk

基本上还通顺,用词上可以慢慢进步
小心时态,
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第1个回答  2008-10-03
It's too long.
第2个回答  2008-10-03
Don't laugh too loud next time!
第3个回答  2008-10-03
天,你给我汉语我重新给你翻译一个好了。
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