论文摘要的英文翻译求助

Question

通过对百胜餐饮集团问题鸡事件的研究，以内部环境、风险评估、控制活动、信息与沟通、检查监督这内部控制的五个要素为中心来分析其内控存在的缺陷。如高速扩张导致管理脱节、外部竞争激烈、外部信息传递透明度差、外部监管力度不够等问题。通过对这些内控缺陷分析，加深对内控的理解的同时，针对这次的事件再加上例往性质类似的案例结合分析，对百胜集团的内部控制提出意见与建议，并发掘改善的途径。

Answer 1

Through research in the problematic chickens of the Yum! Brands Inc., the paper gives analysis over its defects in internal control by focusing on the five major factors of internal environment, risk evaluation, control activities, information and communications, examination and supervision. E.g. management disconnection resulted from rapid expansion, fierce external competition, low transparency of external information transferring, and lack of enough external supervision and control, etc. In the light of the analysis over these defects, a deeper understanding in internal control is obtained. Envisaging in this incident plus the similar cases of the past, the paper puts forward its consultancy regarding the internal control ofYum! Brands Inc., and suggests methods for further improvement.

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Answer 2

By studying the Yum! Brands Inc. tainted chicken event, this essay should analyze(这是直译，也可以用identify) the defects of internal control(这个不确定哪个词条合适，请自行替换专有词) from its five elements: internal enviroment, risk evaluation, activity control, information and communication, inspection. Discuss(不加这个动词无法组成有逻辑的句子) problems such as insufficient management due to fast expansion, fierce external competition, external information flow intransparency, insufficient external inspection. Through analyzing these internal control defects, we(或者是I，看你是一个人写论文还是一个团队写) tend to enrich our understanding toward internal control, and develop suggestions for the internal control of Yum! Brands Inc. by co-analyzing historically similar events and cases.

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Answer 3

中文就有问题，没有一句话有主语，用作论文肯定不行