我写的英语作文请帮我看下有没有语法错误请帮忙改正谢谢

题目:On a Harmonious Dormitory Life
1. 宿舍生活有时会出现不和谐的情况;
2. 一个和谐宿舍生活的必要性;
3. 如何创造和谐的宿舍生活。

Nowadays, more and more people prefer talking about dormitory life, because it plays a significant role in our daily life. It has caused substantial impact on the society and our daily life. Sometimes, in our dormitory maybe have some controversy.
As is known to all, a harmonious dormitory life is important to college students and benefits all the members. On one hand, we can have a good rest and put our heart into study. On the other hand, we will have a good mood and enjoy being together.
How to establish a harmonious dormitory life ? I beliveve it is high time that we took some effective measures to solve this problem. As a proverb says (goes), “Custom makes all things easy..” It is an undeniable fact that try to get rid of your dirty habits, if there are any. A bright future is waiting for us when all the measures are taken seriously implementation.

这个是我按照找的作文模版写的,我英语很差,帮忙看下有没有语法错误.如果这是四级考试能得多少分 谢谢!

1 in our dormitory maybe have some controversy,有语法错误,把in去掉,把maybe改为may
2 we can have a good rest and put our heart into study个人认为把put in to 改为concentrate one,mind on比较好 还是尽量不用heartS吧 3 I beliveve it is high time that we took some effective measures to solve this problem.在下认为这句用的很漂亮!!!4 A bright future is waiting for us when all the measures are taken seriously implementation.似乎后面应改为taken into serious implemention
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