这个是作文题目:
Some people think that robots are very important for human’s future development. Others, however, think that robots are a dangerous invention that could have negative effects on society.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
这个是我写的作文:
There is a growing tendency these days that robots become an essential feature in many aspects of daily life. Tragically, some people advocate that more and more robots will become disadvantage as soon as a boon.From my point of view, we should develop a proper way to invent robot.
In the first place, there is no denying that robots can make our lives more convenient.Robots can be programmed to provide an endless numble of services, which help people in many areas of life such as modern banking, international communication.The most significant point is that you need not to pay any fee for the robots, besides,in comparison to people, robots have much higher working effeiciency.
However,while there are a lot of advantages on robots, its drawbacks should not be forgottern.With the development of information technology, many hi-tech products and robots are available for modern consumers, so they tend to think science and technology is what life is all about, so they tend to care less and less about the humanities, traditions and histories.In addition, increasing the availablity and quality of the robots would unforturnately lead the higher unemployment rate.In other words, the most worrying aspect is that one day robots can do anything as the human beings do, and there is a currently much debate about how to control the situation.
In conclusion, there is an urgent need for developing a sustainable way to cope with inventing robots.It is certainly believed that robots have positive uses, but we should not ignore its unpleasant side effects.In fact, many people have proposed that we should reduce the production of robots.It is my firm suppose that robots if deliberately used, will help to promote the process of society in the near future.
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