高中的时候写了篇类似的作文。。就凑合着用吧。。原文+老师评改
The majority of high schools in China have a rule that students must wear school uniforms every workday. As the voice of democracies is becoming higher and higher, some teenagers begin to suspect the necessity of wearing school uniforms. In my opinion, there are both benefits and disbenefits to wear a school uniform.
On one hand, school uniforms make students be like students. That is to say, teenagers are more likely to obey the school desciplines when they put on uniforms, because they build a spirit of unity among students. Moreover, school uniforms are well-preserved, and they urge us to save money which we will have spent on clothes.
Although there are many benefits of wearing school uniforms, the disbenefits are also easy to see. On the other hand, these poor-designed, outdated clothes, which are often too big or too small, easily make teenagers feel boring. Some students complained that they look untidy in uniforms, for the school uniforms must be worn from Monday to Friday without any washing.
To sum up, we can see both advantages and disadvantages in the problem. The government concerned should try to turn the flaw of school uniforms, to make our teenagers more willing to wear them.
写的不错。不过有些表达不够确切 例如利弊的表达，一般不用disbenefits，你可以用demerit
再如they urge us to save money which we will have spent on clothes.
可以这么改they urge us to save money which we would otherwise have spent on clothes.
另外，不要出现表达不确定的句子，例如school uniforms make students be like students.这种表达不是很确切，有中式英文的感觉。
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