可以帮我批改一下这篇英语作文吗

Question

在句酷批改网打了81分，但是觉得机改的还是有纰漏，麻烦帮忙看一下，谢谢。
Should We Help Strangers?
We used to be taught to help more people as much as we can, no matter how much you know him. Recently, there are increasing number of people against it. Whether we should help strangers can be a question.
Some people claimed that it is always a good quality for people to help strangers. They consisted that if we can help each other and care for each other, we can cope with many problems by ourselves rather than by the government.Our society needs love. Everyone must not want to be leaved alone when in trouble just because you are a stranger.
People who appeal to not to help strangers have their own reasons. Recently there are many instances about people who help the old but be charged for hurting them. You may have a good heart, but helping strangers do have potential risk.
As far as I am concerned, helping others is a traditional virtue. We can't give it up because of some bad examples. If we have a warm heart and be sincerely enough, we will have the power to solve the problem.

Answer 1

Should we help strangers? （即使是标题也不用每个单词都大写，你又不是专业论文）

【大写的明显是我改的】
AT A YOUNG AGE, we WERE taught to help AS MANY PEOPLE as we can, no matter HOW LITTLE DO WE KNOW THEM.

Recently, there are increasing number of people SPOKE OUT against THIS TEACHING/IDEA. Whether OR NOT we should help strangers ONCE AGAIN BECAME a question (OR BETTER YET: BECAME A DEBATE).

Some people claimed that it is always a good quality for people to help OTHERS. They INsist that if we can help each other and care for each other, we can RESOLVE with many problems by ourselves rather than RELY ON the government. Our society needs love. Everyone SHOULD not want to be LEFT alone when in trouble just because you are a stranger.

People who VOTE FOR not helpING strangers have their own reasons. Recently there are many instances about people who helpED OLD PEOPLE THEY MET ON THE STREET but WERE IN TURN SUED BY THE PEOPLE THEY HELPED. You MIGHT have a good heart (OR BETTER YET: YOUR INTENTIONS WERE GOOD), but helping strangers do have potential riskS.

As far as I am concerned, helping others is a traditional virtue. We can't give it up because of some BAD PEOPLE. If we have a warm heart and IF WE ARE sincere, we will have the power to solve the problem (WHAT PROBLEM?).

纯度很高的Chinglish，逻辑性还可以，性格和我一样，写到结论的时候就没耐心了，conclusion满分5分的话最多3分。全文满分一百的话，你自己看看我改了多少了，这要让我高中老师判的话，能55（D）就不错了。

Answer 2

1. How much do you know about Holmes?
2. What did the lady hear at night? (A low whistle.)
3. Who will get the money if the lady dies? Why?
4. What did the lady and her uncle do several times? (Quarreled with each other.)
5. What did Holmes do the next day? (Paid the lady a visit.)
6. What did he find in the wall?
7. What did Holmes examine beside the lady’s bed? (The red bell rope)
8. Where was the end of the rope? (Upon the pillow.)
9. Where did the rope go? (Fastened to a nail.)
10. What was her uncle’s room like? (Little furniture.)

Answer 3

如果有作文题目要求，可以比较客观的评分。例如高考作文，分五档按要点完整性，语言准确性，丰富性及逻辑性打0~5分，6~10分，11~15分，16~20分，21~25分。你先把作文题目要求发上来吧。追问

Should We Help Strangers?

题目就是这个了。

追答

谁要求谁写的给谁看的什么类型（考试）的作文，按评分标准打分。作文重在交际，逻辑性、用词地道是重要的判分依据。把观点表述清楚完整即可。
这个题目可写成正反观点议论文：一些人认为应该+理由，一些人认为不应该+理由，我认为（不）应该+理由。
也可写成：我认为（不）应该+理由123...+结论，可以是递进或并列的理由。
中庸之道的文章：有条件地给予帮助，条件123
原文章脉络为：（1）为什么要帮助别人+（2）为什么有些人不愿意帮助别人+（3）我们应该帮助别人
可以调整顺序为231：如今有些人不愿意帮助他人+我们应该帮助他人+为什么我们应该帮助他人，这样议论的重点就出来了。
若此篇为高考作文（25满分，看各地试卷情况）能得18分左右（这个分数也是看各地高考评分标准的情况）