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这是我们的英语作文 不知道有没有错误 希望各位高手们能多多指点~~
I like play basketball very much. When I’m ten years old, I first got in touch with it and completely fell in love with it. I remember that I have two friends always played with me, we grown up together and of course they become my best friends.
That time, I have a dream. I want go to the NBA in the future. I remember when I told my mother this dream, she didn’t say anything but a smile. Now I know it’s only a dream. But I still love it very much.
Basketball has followed me nine years. When I feel sad, I play with he and will feel very easy; When I feel lonely, I play with he and he told me that there’s a friend always trust me and accompany me; When I feel happy, I will share with he and I think he will pleasure too. I totally regard him as my best friend.
Basketball makes me become a happy boy, I like the things around me everyday. Also, it teaches me, never give up. No matter what, I will do my best and don’t regret. I like Kobe Bryant just because he always tries his best in the game and his spirit lead me to forward.
Here, I want to say thank you my friend, I will together with you forever.
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Answer 1

I like play basketball very much. When I was ten years old, I first got in touch with it and completely fell in love with it. I remember that I had two friends always play with me, we grew up together and of course they became my best friends.
That time, I had a dream. I wanted go to the NBA in the future. I remember when I told my mother this dream, she didn’t say anything but a smile. Now I know it’s only a dream. But I still love it very much.
Basketball has followed me nine years. When I feel sad, I play with him and will feel very ease; When I feel lonely, I play with him and he tell me that there’s a friend always trust me and accompany me; When I feel happy, I will share with him and I think he will pleasure too. I totally regard him as my best friend.
Basketball makes me become a happy boy, I like the things around me everyday. Also, it teaches me, never give up. however, I will do my best and won’t regret. I like Kobe Bryant just because he always tries his best in the game and his spirit lead me to forward.
Here, I want to say thank you my friend, I will together with you forever.

过去时经常忘记哦！一些用词也不太准确！再就是主语和宾语的形式！！！下次需注意哦！

Answer 2

I like play basketball very much. When I was ten years old, I first got in touch with it and completely fell in love with it. I remember that I have two friends always play basketball with me, we grown up together and of course they became my best friends.
In that time, I had a dream. I wanted to go to the NBA in future. I remembered when I told my mother this , she didn’t say anything but a smile. Now I know it’s only a dream. But I still love Basketball very much.
Basketball has accompanyed me nine years. When I feel sad, I will play with him then I will feel very relax; When I feel lonely, I will play with him and he told me that there’s a friend always trust me and accompany me; When I feel happy, I will share with him and I think he will happy too. I totally regard him as my best friend.
Basketball makes me become a happy boy, I like the things around me everyday. Also, it teaches me, never give up. No matter how, I will do my best and no regret. I like Kobe Bryant just because he always tries his best in the game and his spirit lead me to forward.
Here, I want to say thank you my friend, I will together with you forever.

Answer 3

第二句话`` When I`m 改为 When I was 第二句话最好改为"When I was ten years old,I had fell in love with it.

注意你的语法细节``` 改用过去时的没有用`` 单三掌握的很好