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Question

I live in a cosmopoliten city which called Guangzhou.It has many beautiful constructions,such as the Gz Tower,Guangdong Province Museum and the Pearl River.However,the Pearl River has comtaminated by some people who were lack of consciences.Notions about the issue,I considered that the Gz government should take some methods to surmount the problem .It seems like a chronic battle.For example, some people will throwing recyclable things to the Pearl River nor put it into the bin so that the problem as a barrier to prevent Gz from becoming a standard of hygience city and it aslo can't solve briskly as well as these same things will happen inevitably,so we should sustain to protect our Pearl River persistently.
In additional,do you know "Pearl River" is a brand of piano and it is extremely famous and popular in China

Answer 1

①。 I live in a cosmopoliten city which called Guangzhou.
应该去掉which。
改成：I live in a cosmopoliten city called Guangzhou.

②。It has many beautiful constructions,such as the Gz Tower,Guangdong Province Museum and the Pearl River.
这里有几个逗号问题。并且因为pearl river是一条河，不能统称constructions。
改成：It has many beautiful attractions such as the Gz Tower,Guangdong Province Museum, and the Pearl River.

③。However,the Pearl River has contaminated by some people who were lack of consciences.
pearl river 应该是被人们污染，所以要用被动式哦~ 而且some
people who...不需要用were，直接用lack. 句子略有别扭的感觉，所
以我进行了修改。
改成：However,the Pearl River is contaminated by people who lack consciousness。

④。 Notions about the issue, I considered that the Gz government should take some methods to surmount the problem.
同上，句子别扭，略作修改。提议：不要缩写广州。
改成：About this issue, I think that the Guangzhou government should take some action to solve the problem.

⑤。It seems like a chronic battle. For example, some people will throwing recyclable things to the Pearl River nor put it into the bin so that the problem as a barrier to prevent Gz from becoming a standard of hygience city and it aslo can't solve briskly as well as these same things will happen inevitably,so we should sustain to protect our Pearl River persistently.
第一句和第二句可连接。throw不用正在进行式。丢入河中要用into。
句子整体来说有些用词的问题，所以编排组句的时候有些别扭。
建议修改成：It seems like a chronic battle，because, for example, some people will throw recyclable things into the Pearl River rather than puting it into the recycling bin, so the problem becomes a barrier for Guangzhou's becoming of a standard hygience city. Also, the problem can't be solved if the same things keep hapening, so we should do what is good for our Pearl River persistently in order to protect it.

⑥。In additional,do you know "Pearl River" is a brand of piano and it is extremely famous and popular in China
in additional是一种语法错误，应该用in addition,因为additional是个形容词。
还未完结的感觉。
建议修改成：In addition, do you know that the "Pearl River" is a brand of piano， and it is extremely famous and popular in China？

希望对你有帮助！

Answer 2

I live in a cosmopoliten city called Guangzhou.There are many beautiful constructions herw,such as the Gz Tower,Guangdong Province Museum and the Pearl River.However,the Pearl River has been contaminated(spelling 错了） by some people who were lack of consciences.Regarding this issue,I advise the Gz government to take the following actions to surmount the problem .For example, people have been throwing recyclable things to the Pearl River nor put it into the bin so that the problem as a barrier to prevent Gz from becoming a standard of hygience city and it aslo can't solve briskly as well as these same things will happen inevitably,so we should sustain to protect our Pearl River persistently ( change this, 完全不知道你想说什么） .
The "Pearl River" is extremely famous in China, therefore we should make an effort to keep it clean and hygienic at all times。 慢慢改把 我改了一些 太糟糕了追问

contaminated 没有拼错啊？

追答

你刚刚的是comtaminated 。。 你自己看看～

追问

对喔，哈哈。谢谢你。

Answer 3

第一句就有问题! ...which called把which删掉!而且同学,老外们都叫广州Canton!不一定要用拼音拼写出广州!追问

除了这一句，其他呢？