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Question

Physical exercise
With the rising living standards, people do less exercise than before. For example, now many families have their own cars, and they would like to drive their own car instead of walking. But it’s not good for our health. We should do more exercise to keep our body healthy.
We should only spend about 20 minutes every day. You can do some sports like running, playing basketball, playing volleyball and so on. You can also go for a walk with your families after dinner. Go hiking with your friends in weekends is a good idea,too.
Exercise has so many benefits for us. It can make our body more strong. And it also makes us feel relaxed. When you feel pressure, you would go out and do some exercise and you will feel much better.
Physical exercise is good for us. I hope that everyone would like it.

Answer 1

改动过后大致这样。但有些问题需注意，用词应该尽量避免重复，如healthy，physical exercise，要体现自己的词汇的丰富，所以换些近义词。另外应该有意识用些承上启下的词汇，句号隔开的句子之间要体现逻辑上的连接，用些besides，on the other hand，therefore，as a result 等等的短语，这要靠平时的积累了。另外整个文章的主语，用we 还是you，最好前后统一。如果给别人建议，当然是you，但要号召大家一起做就是we。总之要站在读者角度考虑。如果有能力还是要用一些从句，体现自己的语法能力。这是一篇建议或提倡体育锻炼的文章，也可以用几个祈使句，加感叹号，体现文字的活跃和句型的多样。

Physical exercise
With the rising of living standards, people do less exercises than before. For example, now many families have their own cars, and they would like to get around by car instead of walking. But it’s no good for our health. People should do more exercise to keep the body strong and active.
We should only spend about 20 minutes every day. （what we should do is 20 minutes everyday）You can do some sports like running, playing basketball, playing volleyball and so on. You can also go for a walk with your families after dinner. Going hiking with your friends at weekends is a good idea,too.
Physical exercise is of a great benefit to us. It can not only make our body stronger but also also makes us feel relaxed. When you have too much pressure, you would go out and do some exercise and you will feel much better.
Physical exercise is good for us. I hope that everyone would like it.

Answer 2

第一段中的their own car 改为their own cars第二段举例应该用such as而不应用like.第三段开头Exercise改为Doing exercise第四段would改为would better最后一段的would改为will

Answer 3

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