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Student pressure
My idea is you not put too much pressures on you daughter.Should reduce mind gap with you daughter.

Because it is possible that too much pressures have bad influence for you daughter heart.For example, her can not to sleep at night and cause a lot of spirits problems.It is hoped that less some pressures that make for good health.

Why have enormous students depression?The first reason is that parent give students too much achievement pressures.The second reason is parent deal with child very serious.

There are several measures for us to adopt.First,you can reduce you daughter exam result pressures.Second,you have to let you daughter have more spare time.Third you have to patience communicate with you daughter know her minds.

My name is Li Hua,a middle school student too.If you want to reduce mind gap with you daughter.I have a good advice that is become her friend.

In conclusion,best wishes to you and your daughter.

Answer 1

My idea is that you do not put too much pressure（既然知道用much形容pressure，就应该知道pressure是不可数名词，不可加”s“） on your（用代词所有格） daughter, and you should reduce mind gap with your daughter.

Because it is possible that too much pressure would have bad influence on your daughter. For example, she can not sleep at night which would cause a lot of spiritual（spirit形容词形式） problems. It is hoped that less pressure would make better health.

Why students have enormous depression? The first reason is that parents(复数) give students too much achievement pressure.The second reason is that parents deal with child very seriously(形容词变副词).

There are several measures for us to adopt. First, you can reduce your daughter exam result pressure. Second, you have to let your daughter have more spare time. Third, you have to patiently(改成副词) communicate with you daughter to (加了个to) know her mind(不可数名词).

My name is Li Hua, a middle school student too. If you want to reduce mind gap with your daughter. I have a good advice which(that改成which从句) is to become her friend.

In conclusion, best wishes to you and your daughter.

我只把语法改了。
在用词上和其他方面有很多不够准确的，所以作文读上去会很别扭。

若有疑问欢迎追问。追问

在用词上和其他方面有很多不够准确的，所以作文读上去会很别扭.

首先非常感谢你的帮助，请问我该怎么做才能快速增加我的英语写作能力。我很苦恼啊，我省自学的。语法书也看了不少，但是在做单选题或者写作文的时候就不知道怎么运用了，求指导，谢谢。

追答

不用苦恼啊~ 有自学的志向就很不错了~ 自学的总会有缺陷而且进度不快，所以要有人指导啊。
要增高写作能力没有什么比多读别人的文章更好的了，你能从中学到很多方面包括语法、词组的运用，也能增加你的词汇量。当然你要会做笔记。

一个有趣的现象是能地道应用英语的人考试不一定高分，所以如果你学英语的目的是考试拿高分的话，专门拿考题、练习题来钻研和反复练习是最有效的了。