自己写了个英语短文，麻烦大家指出语法错误，或有什么更好的表达方式，谢谢了~~

Question

How to improve the efficiency of studying English?
First ,we must have great interest in english
Second，we should practice English every day
Last, if we had condition, we shouldcommunicate with foreigner
If you can accept my advices. your English must have an improvement sooner or later

Answer 1

foreigner 切记，英语单词可数的要不有冠词，要不用复数，不可这样用（除了特殊短语等）所以此处用 foreigners更好。
advices该词无复数，要想用可用suggestions
if we had condition, we shouldcommunicate with foreigner 用了虚拟语气，不错

Answer 2

如何提高英语学习的效率？首先，我们必须在英国第二大的利益，我们应该每天练习英语，如果有条件，我们应该如果你能接受我的建议与外国人沟通。你的英语必须有一个改进迟早

Answer 3

如果用if possible（如果可能的话）代替if we had condition没准更好呢？
You must have an improvement...我觉得用must就说的有点绝对和坚硬,或许可以说I'm sure you'll...

Answer 4

If we have condition.
advise 不可数